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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in 5 different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in 5 different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information based on
consumer
 spending on different items in several
countries
 in 2002.
Overall
, it is immediately apparent that the
percentage
 of national
consumer
expenditure
 in
food
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the food
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/drinks/tobacco
category
 held the lion’s share
while
leisure
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the leisure
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/education
category
 was the lowest in
allocated
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the allocated
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 budget by all
countries
 in the given year.
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A more
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 detailed look at the table reveals that the
percentage
 of national
consumer
expenditure
in
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 food/drinks/tobacco was the highest in Turkey and stood at 32.14% ,
whereas
 Sweden was the lowest with
the
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a
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 rate of 16.36% in the same
category
. Interestingly, the
percentage
 of national
consumer
expenditure
of
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in
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clothing
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the clothing
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/footwear
category
 was the highest in Italy and accounted for 9.00% ,
while
 Sweden constituted 5.40%. It is worth mentioning that there was a wide gap between the first and
second
 categories in all
countries
. In sharp contrast with
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the
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food/drinks/tobacco
category
 leisure/education
category
 experienced a plunge in
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the allocated
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 budget by all
countries
.
However
, Turkey held the lion’s share and made up 4.35% ,
while
 Spain was the lowest and comprised 1.98% , the
percentage
 of
expenditure
 was too close among the figures of
countries
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer, countries, percentage, expenditure, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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