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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart provided gives information about how many trips
was
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were
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 performed by individuals who stayed residential and out of
residential
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the residential
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 area
during
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for
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a
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quite less than
decade
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 (1996-2005).
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the number of travels done by nonresidents went up considerably until
Westgage
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Westgate
 street and Park line approached
to
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the traffic.
Firstly
,
figure
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the figure
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 belonging non-residents climbed dramatically in the first four years
that
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which
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 accounted for more than 8,000 trips
wheres
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where
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 journeys of hotel clients dropped significantly in 2000
due to
 parking limits in the city
center
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centre
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.
Moreover
, in 2003 on which mentioned streets closed to traffic, both figures dropped, especially nonresidents reduced journeys to
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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that
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dropped up to the lowest number
that is
 three thousand whilst it rose again annually compared with vibrations made by residents in 2003 and 2005.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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