The graph bellow shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2010.
The line graph illustrates how many people
was
traded in three Change the verb form
were
sectors
(Public, Private and Self- employed) of the economy in the UK, 2000-2010.
Overall
, what stand
out from the graph both the self-employed and public part contracting Change the verb form
stands
rates
rose considerable
periods of time, Change preposition
for considerable
while
private region rates
declined dramatically.
If we compare that sector, as regard
that though given information, we can see all Change the form of the verb
regards
sectors
service rates
began in 2000. At that time additionally
, there was considerable
between them, public region Correct article usage
a considerable
rates
, which were approximate
38%, private district Replace the word
approximately
rates
almost was
50% and self-employed Unnecessary verb
apply
rates
were under 20%. After that, private district rates
decreased dramatically till end
of time, which was in 2010 and its Add an article
the end
rates
Fix the agreement mistake
rate
was
20 %.
Change the verb form
were
Nevertheless
, another two sectors
which are public
and Correct article usage
the public
self hiring
Add a hyphen
self-hiring
sectors
, we can see plenty of people was
employed. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
They
Both of them rose steadily, sometimes dropped a bit, and Correct pronoun usage
apply
finally
surged 10% more than the beginning. In 2010, self-employed
part was 20%, Correct article usage
the self-employed
furthermore
public region Add a comma
,furthermore
rates
were the highest with just over 50%.Submitted by pirnapasovjoshqin on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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