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The diagram bellow shows the proses by which bricks are manufactured for building industry.

The diagram bellow shows the proses by which bricks are manufactured for building industry.
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The diagram reveals the proses
how
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of how
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 are produced bricks for
building
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the building
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 industry. There are a few steps, from digging with special techniques to delivering ready production.
The first step is
 that digger takes clay and put
into
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it into
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 special metal gird. After that clay
jump
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jumps
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 down to
soothing
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the soothing
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 place which is
roller
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the roller
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 surface and is moving
next
standing
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to standing
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 via
this
 roller face. And at
this
 point, add some sand and water in order to mix well. After being mixed, it is moved to a special box via
special
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a special
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 crack and
go
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goes
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 out another crack Presley condition.
Subsequently
, wire cutter chops were the Presley clay option size and appear air-brick. In order to dry,
air-brick
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the air-brick
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is move
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move
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moved
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 to
drying
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the drying
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 oven and there stay
24
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for 24
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-48 hours. After that, start 1 moment of drying
moderate
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at moderate
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 temperatures, which are 200°c---980°c.
Following
this
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these
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 2
point
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points
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, consider high temperatures from 870°C to1300°C. And
then
 they cool
next
 during 48 - 72 hours
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in at
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at
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a
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cooling
Add an article
the cooling
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 chamber.
Finally
,
this
 brick packaging to
special
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a special
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 van and they are delivered to be needed building areas.
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