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Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do different kinds of jobs. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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I definitely agree with the notion that individuals should
change
 their career at least once in life. There are many benefits to changing careers because you may be exposed to different work environments that will give them many opportunities to learn new skills, and being able to learn and experience new things will help.
we
Suggestion
We
 do not get bored and lose the spirit of working, it will stimulate the brain to always have to explore and learn to adapt to new environments, new jobs.
On the other hand
, the main drawback of a
change
 is that it can be uncomfortable for some people. Because some people don't like to approach new things, they are timid because they are afraid of failing in a new environment, they are so familiar with the current environment, they think
that is
 enough and they are afraid to
change
, fear of starting. From the beginning, I think people have the ability to adapt to different things. New things can be uncomfortable for a while, but people can accept the changes soon. In conclusion, changing certain initial discomforts, but once you decide to
change
 your job it will
also
change
 your mind, help you access more opportunities in life and it will teach you different skills and experiences. In my opinion,
change
 is a good thing

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