New technologies have changed children life. Advantages/disadvantages???

It is true that the introduction of new technologies effect to people
life
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live
. Especially children have altered their daily activities and usual habits in
modern age
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the modern age
. There are some benefits and drawbacks of
this
change, but I strongly believe that new technologies are profitable for children's bright future. In the positive effect, children always
use
technologies
such
as phone, laptop and others. These equipments are very crucial as air for children.
First
one is that a lot of young people
use
these technologies for their study or basic activity. Because pupils can download materials, books easily by
technology
.
Moreover children
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Moreover, children
do not go to
library
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the library
for reading or taking some books.
Instead
of it, they
use
Internet for doing
this
work. So many people regard that new technologies save time.
Secondly
,
technology
has created many opportunities for
children
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children's
education
.
For instance
, ill pupil can take part in lessons at
present day
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the present day
. Because in many countries the role of online
education
is utmost.
In addition
nowadays Covid-19
coronavirus
is spreading rapidly among the people. So all schools, universities, colleges were closed by
government
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the government
in a lot of countries. But lessons did not stop at schools. All
education
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
Centers
(facilities)
use
online
education
system.
For example
, I regularly opt for online lessons. All things are possible with
technology
, so it is very
benefial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for children to
spending
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spend
efficiently their free time.
Nevertheless
, new technologies
alsa
in addition
also
have more significant adverse effects. The
first
one is that sedentary
lifestyle namely
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lifestyle, namely
(
preciesly
indicating exactness or preciseness
precisely
) a lot of children spend too much time using the computer, mobile phone or TV. They neglect outdoor activities,
consequently
it cause to many
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it causes many
it causes to many
it causes of many
it cause of many
health problems
such
as obesity and damaged
eye-sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
.
Secondly
, new technologies disturb them from their study. Some pupils are becoming crazy about
technology
.
As a result
, they lose memory,
furthermore they
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furthermore, they
face
to
being one more than one
two
problems, challenges at their study. To conclude, it seems to me that
benefits
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the benefits
of modern technologies are dominant from negative sides of it. It depends on people how to
use
technology
.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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