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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are wave
energy
 machines
on
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diagrams
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the diagrams
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 below.
The devices
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 of
such
 type are
applying
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 for producing alternative electricity. Nowadays big variety of machines are been used by men around the globe to capture
energy
 from free natural resources. As scientists say,
the
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apply
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70 per cent of the Earth’s surface is covered by ocean.
That is
 why
wave
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a wave
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energy
machine
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machines
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supposed
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 to be the cheapest way to get
energy
. The device depicted on
diagram
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the diagram
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 consists of two chambers. One
chamber
 is above another, so we can name them
chamber
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chambers
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 of
first
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the first
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 and
second
level
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levels
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. The
chamber
 of
second
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the second
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level
 contains two turbines and
generator
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a generator
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. The principle of work is
next
: when the fluid fills
the
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chamber
 number one, the
air flow
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airflow
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 pushes the turbine threw the space between chambers.
Then
turbine
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the turbine
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start
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starts
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 rotating and
generator
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the generator
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 is taking the electricity.
On
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 the
second
diagram
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 we see the difference between installation
level
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levels
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.
Due to
 the depth of
installation
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the installation
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level
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 there will be more
powerfull
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powerful
 income air flow but expenses for installation will change
accordingly
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, chamber, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 2 times.
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