It has become easier and more affordable for people to travel to other coutries. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples from your experience

It is irrefutable that international tourism has taken mammoth dimensions as it has become the backbone of many economies of the world.
This
situation has merits and demerits as well but from my point of view, its advantages
overstrip
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outweigh
its disadvantages.
To begin
with, the first and foremost is employment.Owing
to
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,
tourism
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the tourism
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industry provides
plethora
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of avenues of jobs to local people,who might be unemployed
otherwise
as they can work in many hotels,
restaurants
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and restaurants
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,
tour
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as tour
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guides, drivers and so on.
Therefore
, not only
they
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do they
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earn bread and butter but
also
can
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raise their standard of living,
secondly
, tourists get
first hand
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knowledge as they come to know about the culture, traditions and
life style
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lifestyle
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of
host
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country.
As a result
, they widen their horizon of knowledge by acquiring
this
level of information.
Additionly
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Additionally
, when visitors pump a large chunk of money ,
this
allows local
business
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businesses
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like hotels, restaurants and shops to flourish.
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, in
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means that the whole economy of
region
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thrives.
However
, on the other side, it has
few
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a few
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demerits
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also
. First of all, tourists give birth to criminals as they have several precious and costly things .
For example
-
camera
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cameras
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, jewellery and cash
so
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apply
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some natives think
them
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of them
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as easy prey.
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results
into
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rising crime at
tourism
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tourist
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spots.
Furthermore
, it poses a
deterimental
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detrimental
affect
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on health because tourists spread
alot
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a lot
of garbage
on
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in
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different places, which may cause grave problems.Recently, a fatal infectious disease called
covid-19
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come
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into view, which
are
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causing deaths globally
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on
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alarming rate
and
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surprisingly no vaccination, treatment or medicine
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found
till now so
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,
visitors
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so visitors
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had better think about
ownself
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themselves
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as well as
host
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the host
a host
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country. In conclusion,
i
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would opine that its pros overlooked its cons and it is
a
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high time to solve
this
problem on
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goverment
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government
level and individual level.
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