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The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.

The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.
#method #glass #containers
This
 image
demonstraites
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demonstrates
 how glass bottles are formed.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there are nine stages in the process,
begining
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beginning
 with
heated
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the
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glass and the process ends with
disposal
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the disposal
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 of the damaged containers
while
 the intact
bottels
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bottles
 go to packaging.
According to
 the diagram the first stage of the process
,
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is melting ,where the glass
placed
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is placed
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 in
furnace
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a furnace
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 at 105 celluloseThen
he
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apply
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put
it
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apply
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in the mould and
press
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presses
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it
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to form.After that, The container
get
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 to
thick
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a thick
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 wall and
follwing
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following
 that air inter to
made
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make
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 a final
shep
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step
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. again the
buttel
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butter
 is heated at 482
Kiln
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.It
need
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 to
cooling
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 at 25 for sixty mins before
to get
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getting
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 ready.In the final
step
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,step
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 the
man made
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man-made
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a check
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check
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checked
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 on the
condtion
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condition
 of
flasks
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the flasks
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.If the
damge
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damage
 of the containers he will disposal
it
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them
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 in the waste and the intact it goes to packaging.
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