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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart provides
date
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data
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 about science qualifications performed by Malaysian
along with
 Singaporean people. In
summarize
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summary
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, as can be clearly seen that the majority of citizens in both countries
reveals
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reveal
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 out of science
while
Correct article usage
a masters
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masters
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master's
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 degree is chosen to the smallest extent.
To begin
 with master's degrees, the result is done in the same way
accounted
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accounting
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 for less than four
percent
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per cent
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,
while
 Malaysians (10%)
are outran
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are outrun
are outrunning
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 in double in terms of bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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 by Singaporeans
that
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which
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 made up 20%.
Conversely
, Malaysians showed a higher proportion in school-graduating exams (34,5%)
while
 it is lower in Singapore (30%).
Furthermore
, in terms of being unqualified in science is much more than others in both nations that quite more than 64% and 60% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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