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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below
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The summary of a survey of
adult
education
 is presented in the 2 charts. The bar chart summarizes the factors that caused adults to continue their
education
,
while
 the pie chart shows the public opinion regarding the
cost sharing
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 for
adult
education
.
According to
 the bar chart, 40% of the respondents mentioned “interest in the subject” as the reason they decided to go back to school.
This
 factor was followed closely with the aim to gain
qualification
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 at 38%.
On the other hand
, only 9% of the survey participants said that they went to school in order to meet more people.
This
 is the least popular reason among the 7 given. Regarding
cost sharing
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, people are of the opinion that the majority of fees should be covered by the individual (40%),
while
 35% of them believe that
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employers should lend
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 helping hand. Taxpayers,
on the other hand
, are only expected to contribute 25% to
adult
education
. In summary, the survey showed a mixed
opinion
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opinions
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 regarding the reasons and
cost sharing
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cost-sharing
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 for
adult
education
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adult, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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