The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.
The two charts
comoares
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compares
compare
the main
exercise
reasons and locations in terms of adults who are aged from 20 to 50 years old conducted by a survey.
It is clear that
main
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the main
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reason for
people
to
exercise
is recreation,
while
there are least
people
choose
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who choose
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to
exercise
to improve their mood. it is
also
noticeable that the most frequent
exercise
location is the gym.
Two fifths
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of
people
go to
exercise
for recreation, which was almost twice as much as
of
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for
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the purpose of muscle toning. The percentage of
people
who choose to
exercise
to lose weight and improve their mood
are
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almost
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same
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the same
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number which
are
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is
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12% and 10% respectively. 14% of
people
choose to
exercise
to prevent diseases which
tooks
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took
the
third
place among these five
exercise
reasons. Looking more closely at places which
people
usually go to for
exercises
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exercise
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, there was a noticeably
higer
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higher
proporation
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proportion
of
people
prefer
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who prefer
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gyms which
consists
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consist
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of 35% of
people
. Parks were the
second
attractive place that
people
like to go to
exercise
which took 15% lower than that
of
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gyms. The
ramaining
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remaining
45% were equally divided
distributed
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and distributed
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for
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to
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other locations which were public
sport
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venues, playgrounds, and other public places.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words exercise, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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