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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the number of males and females who graduated in Canada between 1992 and
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2007 in the regular interval of two.
Initially
, the
women
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 graduation counts
were
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steadily increased from nearly 100,000 in 1992 to 105,000 in 1995. After that, it started slowly dropping from nearly 1996 to 2001 by approximately two
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 and
then
 it rose sharply
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over the
period
; meanwhile, it remained relatively stable in 2004. With regards to male graduates, tally with almost 70,000 in 1992 and
then
 it gradually increased by around a count of 5000 within 2.5 years. From 1998 to 2002
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 considered
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period
 and
then
 it substantially increased over the
period
.
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, the number of
males
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graduated
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 counts outnumbered the female counts throughout the
period
whereas
 both
genders
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 individual
timeline
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 showed similar fluctuation.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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