I’ll be free some evenings and one weekend. I want to make the most of this opportunity, so I’d like your advice please: where to go, what to do, and why?
Hi, Chris! Congratulations on getting a new job! And it is great you are
finally
getting a chance to visit
our town. First of all, you absolutely need to visit
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Aqua 3000”, it’s got all the awesome waterslides, the most amazing shapes and heights. We have different kinds of saunas there as wellChange the punctuation
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, I would advise you to visit
our new 5D cinema. I remember, you have
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one of those, well, here is your chance! It is an exciting and unforgettable experience, you’ll be sitting in a moving chair, feel
the wind or even water dripping down on your head. I know you are a big fan of horror movies, and our cinema has a large choice of them. On your free Wrong verb form
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31/11”. At the time of your Change the punctuation
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there will be performing an awesome DJ Skream, you have probably heard of him. The club itself is a superb place to hang out at
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dance. The bartender makes the most delicious cocktails in the world, I swear. I hope some of my suggestions will Fix the infinitive
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on one of your free evenings you will find time to stop by my house and we’ll have a nice chat about your new job. Take care, JuliaCorrect your spelling
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Linking words are very important in your essay.
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