You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter: • say how you feel about his/her performance • give details of your music-related activities • explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities

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Dear

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Hopkins, My name is Kao Mao. I have been listening to you for three years and

last

week I attended your concert at the Barclays Premium Center. I am writing to express my delight about

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performance that will never be forgotten as well as to ask

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advice. Needless to say that it was a brilliant and breathtaking performance where I was mesmerized by all songs. I had been dreaming about seeing your performance live and

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week was one of the best moments in my life. I have been playing

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guitar since I enrolled in a music academy.

week I am going to take an exam which will decide whether I am ready to perform in front of a large audience or not. I can imagine how you are busy with concert tours, but I would be appreciative if you share some advice to help me to become more proficient in

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field. Your experience and knowledge would be helpful for me to pass an exam, and even more, to achieve the highest results in music. Thank you very much for your contributions to the music world. Yours faithfully, Kao Mao

Thu May 07 2020

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

197 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

stellar performance
captivating
musical prowess
talent
repertoire
collaboration
mentorship
resonate
aspiring musician
composition
rendition
inspirational
vocal range
harmonize
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Young children have a special talent for language learning. Children should be taught other languages at an early age.

Many people think modem communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

many students take part time jobs while studying in university, you think it's a good idea or bad idea

Government investment in the art, such as music and theaters is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?