Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this ? Is this a positive or negative development ?
Recently ,
children
are
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have been
families
to be successful . There are several reason
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reasons
this
and as far as I am concerned , It is definitely negative
trend . There might be two Add an article
a negative
the negative
reason
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reasons
of
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for
this
situation. Firstly
, children
are expected to achieve success which their parents could not reach in the past . Namely , Families
are trying to acquire their
goals they dreamed and could not gain before , by using their child's Change the word
the
life
. For example
, my father always wanted me to study medicine beacuse
he always wanted to be a doctor when he was young . Correct your spelling
because
Secondly
, In our age, Success means having a good job and that means money as well . As adults know very well , at the present time , everything is related to money . Hence
, Parents who experienced
economic problems during their Wrong verb form
experience
life
, wish that their children
's have better
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a better
life
contrary to their's. According to
a report published by Erkan Önler ,a family therapist in the UK , families
having money issues are found to be show
more concern about the future of their Change the verb form
show
child's
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children
Finally
, Because of that kind of reason moms and dads are forced their childrens
to be successful . In my opinion , pushing Correct your spelling
children
childs
to Correct your spelling
children
be succeed
can cause negative effects , as Change the verb form
succeed
this
situation may lead to affect their improvement. Because ıf children
grow up under pressure , their confidence and creativity which is
the most significant Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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factor
factors
succeed
will never improve . Replace the word
success
Furthermore
, instead
of pushing children
to work on
a specific department Change preposition
in
such
as engineering or law , families
should encourage their kids to study in a domain that they want . Because doing job
you like is the only way to reach triumph in your Add an article
the job
a job
life
. Moreover
, being parent
means supporting your Add an article
a parent
children
and standing behind them regardless of failure or success. In conclusion , Although
forcing children
to be succesful
is considered by Correct your spelling
successful
the
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apply
families
as if it is benefical
, in Correct your spelling
beneficial
reality
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reality,
ıt
may cause failure . Correct your spelling
it
Thus
, instead
of putting presssure
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pressure
to
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on
children
to succeed , families
should support them under all circumstances.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
