The two pie charts compare the different sources on which children charity in the USA had spend and received money in the year 2016.

The two pie charts compare the different sources on which children charity in the USA had spend and received money in the year 2016.
The two pie charts compare the different sources on which
children
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charity
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in the USA had
spend
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and received
money
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the money
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in the year 2016.
Overall
, the most
revenue
earned by the
organsiation
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organisation
came from the food that was donated to them followed by
this
was the one received from contributions from the community.
Whereas
the spending was mostly on the program services.
According to
the data, food donations accumulated the major percentage of the total
revenue
generated, accounting
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86.6%. Followed by
this
,
the
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community contributions
was
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the
second
most
revenue generating
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activity contributing 10.4% which is 8 times less
from
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the earnings made from donated food.
Revenue
from programs, investments, government grants and other income sources were significantly small contributors which accumulated to only 3
percent
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of the total. The
expenses
of the USA charity in 2016 were mostly toward the program services the percentage of which was
solid
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95.8%. Fundraising, management and general
expenses
were the other
expenses
incurred by the
children
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charity where they spend 2.6% on fundraisers the spending on management and general
expenses
stood at 1.6%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue, expenses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable organization
  • non-profit sector
  • financial allocation
  • philanthropy
  • government subsidies
  • individual contributors
  • fundraising activities
  • expenditure breakdown
  • financial transparency
  • budgetary constraints
  • donor base
  • revenue streams
  • fiscal responsibility
  • overheads
  • sustainability
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