We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Some
people
believe that we should not help people
in other countries
as long as there are problems in our own society. I disagree with this
view because I believe that we should try to help as many people
as possible. On the one hand, I accept that it is important to help our neighbours and fellow citizens. In most communities
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communities,
people
who are impoverished or disadvantaged in some way. It is possible to find homeless people
, for example
, in even the wealthiest of cities, and for those who are concerned about this
problem, there are usually opportunities to volunteer time or give money to support these people
. In the UK,people
can help in a variety of ways, from donating clothing to serving free food in a soup kitchen. As the problems are on our doorstep, and there are obvious ways to help, I can understand why some people
feel that we should prioritise local charity. At the same time, I believe that we have an obligation to help those who live beyond our national borders. In some countries
the problems that Add a comma
countries,
people
face are much more serious than those in our own communities, and it is often even easier to help. For example
, when children are dying from curable diseases in African countries
, governments and individuals in richer countries
can save lives simply by paying for vaccines that already exist. A small donation to an international charity might have a much greater impact than helping in our local area. In conclusion, it is true that we cannot help everyone, but in my opinion
national boundaries should not stop us from helping those who are in need.Add a comma
opinion,
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite