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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The two pictorial maps illustrate an Island, before and after the renovation of some tourist
facilities
.
Overall
, there are so many tourist
facilities
 that have
added
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been added
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 after construction
such
 as footpaths and vehicle
track
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tracks
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 but no changes in
total
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the total
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 area.
However
, the attraction of tourists will increase after renovation.
According to
before
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the map, there were no restaurants
and
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or
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 reception for tourists.
However
, the most important thing is that there
ware
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were
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 no accommodation
facilities
 for tourists.
As a result
, many houses have
built
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been built
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such
 as about 14 houses,
besides
 the restaurant and reception.
Moreover
, the swimming facility has added new infrastructure.
However
, the boating system has developed recently and
also
 pier has
added
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 which is connected by a vehicle track. The most interesting thing is that the number of coconut trees remained unchanged even
if
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after construction and
developed
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development
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 so many
facilities
. Before there was no footpath to walk.
As a result
, for creating a walking opportunity, the footpath system introduces at three different locations which are noticeable.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as a result, however, such".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words facilities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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