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The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The table
give
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gives
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 information about the proportion of students
which
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who
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visiting
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visited
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 four different types
high
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of high
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school
 from 2008 to 2009. In general, the highest rate of
student
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students
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 visiting Voluntary-controlled
Schools
,
when
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while
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 the lowest percentage of
student
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students
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 in Specialist
School
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Schools
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. The table data clearly shows that in 2000 Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 one and a fifth of students attended,
while
 only 12
percent
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per cent
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 of 100 students attended community
schools
, after 5 years attendance in the two
schools
 is the same, but in 2009 in Community
school
 percentage of
student
 attended increase until 58, when Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 the percentage of pupils enrolled fell backwards to 20
percent
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per cent
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. As can be seen in the Specialist
School
 at the beginning rate of
student
 visiting was less
on
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than
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 12
percent
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per cent
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 than in Grammar
School
, but
at the end
 of the period in
Grammar
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the Grammar
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School
 and Specialist
School
 rate of
student
 visiting dropped
approximately
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by approximately
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on
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apply
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12
percent
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per cent
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, student, schools, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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