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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The map shows how the village of Ryemouth developed between 1995 and the present. The most noticeable changes are the elimination of
fishing
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the fishing
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port
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ports
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 and
conversion
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the conversion
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 of farmland
to
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into
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golf
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the golf
a golf
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course
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courses
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.
To begin
 with,in 1995 there was a huge fish market along the coast and adjoining that was the fishing port.today fishing port is all gone and
fish
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the fish
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 market is converted into sea-view apartments. Moving along the coast in
east
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the east
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 direction, there was a café which remained unchanged. On the other side on
parallel
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a parallel
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 road running along the coast, opposite
to
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the fish market were shops which have now become restaurants. Now,
hotel
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the hotel
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 at the corner
also
 had the facility of car parking, which was not there in the past. In North West portion, residential housing has increased along the main road and with
construction
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the construction
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 of
new
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a new
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 road which is going in
west
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the west
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 direction. There was
large
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a large
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 forest park adjacent to the farmland in
east
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the east
an east
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 direction in 1995 which is now converted into
the
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a
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 huge golf course with a tennis course down the south.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • key features
  • contrasting
  • developments
  • alterations
  • enhancements
  • infrastructure
  • recreational facilities
  • emerging
  • adaptation
  • population growth
  • connectivity
  • accessibility
  • preserve
  • aesthetics
  • analytically
  • livability
  • notable facilities
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