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the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The national consumer consumption in five different
countries
 in 2002 has three different categories: Food, Drinks, and Tobacco, Clothing/Footwear, and Leisure/Education. The table shows the percentage of consumer spending in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey.
Firstly
, the European
countries
 aside from Ireland have low
expenditure
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expenditures
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 ranging
15
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from 15
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% to 18% in terms of the first category.
This
 shows that the customer spending in these three
countries
 is still manageable since the customer doesn't spend too much of their income
compare
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 to the spending in Ireland, especially Spain.
Hence
, the future economic growth in the two
countries
 that have high
percentage
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percentages
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 could be compromised because of insufficient savings and investment.
Secondly
,
Clothing
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the Clothing
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 and Footwear expenditure
percentage
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percentages
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 of
countries
 aside from Italy are closely related to each other.
On the other hand
, Italy
have
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2.5
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a 2.5
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% to 3.5% difference between all of the nations.
As a result
, customer spending soars in
this
 category.
Thirdly
,
Leisure
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the Leisure
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 and Education expenditure of all the nations is closely related to each other. It is
not
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no
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a dramatically
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dramatically
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dramatic
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 high and low difference in each variable.
Therefore
, we can conclude that
there's
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perplexed
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perplexing
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 occasions happening here because
consumer
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consumers
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spend
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spends
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 more on Food, Drinks, and Tobacco
more
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apply
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than
in
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on
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the
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apply
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Leisure and Education.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • food
  • drinks
  • tobacco
  • clothing
  • footwear
  • household goods
  • services
  • leisure
  • education
  • other products
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • followed by
  • in all countries
  • various
  • summarise
  • main features
  • relevant
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • spending
  • table
  • goods
  • data
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