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The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The given six pie charts demonstrated the
water
 usage of six different regions of the world (North
America
, South
America
,
Europe
,
Africa
, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
)
on
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in
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 three types of use (agricultural,
industry
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industrial
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, and domestic) which represented in percentage.
Overall
, the
used
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use
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 of
water
for
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in
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 South
America
Asia
 and
Africa
were
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was
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 mostly for
agriculture
,
meanwhile
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,meanwhile
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 North
America
 and
Europe
 had
the
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a
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 similar portion in terms of industrial and
agriculture
. There
were
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was
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a
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apply
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minimal
water
 usage for domestic use in all six areas of the world. North
America
 and
Europe
was
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were
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 the two
region
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regions
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 that used
water
 on
main ly
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mainly
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agriculture
 and industrial use with almost half for North
America
 (48
percent
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per cent
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) and 53
percent
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per cent
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 in terms of factory and
agriculture
 used of a number that exceeded 30
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per cent
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percent
 with 39
percent
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per cent
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 for North
America
 and 32 for
europe
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Europe
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. In terms of
water
 usage in South
America
,
Asia
, and
Africa
, the biggest proportion
were
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was
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water
 used for
agriculture
 with
the
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a
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 percentage that exceeded three
fifth
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fifths
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 for all of them 71
percent
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per cent
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 for South
America
, 84 for
Africa
 and 88 and 81 within
Asia
.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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