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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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data about
purchasing
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the purchasing
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 power of
Fairtrade –labelled
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Fairtrade–labelled
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coffee
 ad bananas, including five European countries in 1999 and 2004 separately.
It is clear that
 the total amount of
coffee’s
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sales
 increased in 2004,
by
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in
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 the same regard
banana’s
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banana
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 demand boomed except
of
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for
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 2 countries.
According to
first
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the first
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 table (
coffee)
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 the
sales
 of
coffee
 were
th
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the
 highest and grew 10 times as much
euro
 in 2004 (20
euro
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euros
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) compared to 1999( 1,5
euro
). The proportion of
sales
 had a growth in
Switherland
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Switzerland
 by 3
euro
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euros
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, in Denmark by 2
euro
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euros
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, in Belgium
0,7
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by 0,7
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euro
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euros
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 and
lastly
 in Sweeden by 0,2
euro
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euros
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 in 1999. Turning to
banana’s
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banana
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sales
,
Switherland
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Switzerland
 took the lead compared to
coffee
 (UK), the banana
was
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sold more
32
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than 32
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euro
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euros
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 in
Switherland
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Switzerland
, 4,5
euro
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euros
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 in
UK
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the UK
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,
1,4
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and 1,4
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euro
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euros
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 in Belgium. By marked contrast, Sweeden and Denmark’s
sales
 declined by 0,8 and 0,2
euro
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euros
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 in the following year respectively.
Overall
,
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in comparsion
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comparsion
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comparison
 between 1999 and 2004 the general number
number
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of
bananas’
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bananas
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 and
coffee’s
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coffee
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sales
 increased,
whereas
two
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the two
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 countries did not solely follow
this
 suit in the terms of
banana’s
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banana
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sales
.
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