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Nowadays more and more people have access to the Internet. But constant availability of any information worsens people's memory and critical thinking skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Along with the development of technology, people nowadays can easily access the Internet for
information
.
However
, the availability of
information
 on the Internet has raised concerns that human’s memories and logical thinking skills would be adversely impacted
as a result
. Personally,
this
 conviction may be the problem in some cases, while the Internet is beneficial if people utilize it properly. In the
first
 place, the constant availability of search results on the Internet could deteriorate users’ memory and analytical thinking competency. In fact, people now can search for answers just by some clicks on the mouse when they forget the formula. In short terms, the Internet seems to make our life more convenient and effective.
Nevertheless
, in long terms,
this
 process would cause human to depend on the Internet and gradually lose their self-esteem.
Instead
 of managing to come up with novel ideas, employees,
for example
, tend to copy the other researchers’ results on the Internet and hand them to the director.
In other words
, the available source of
information
 could prevent people from analysing the problem in a comprehensive way. In the
second
 place, I am of the view that people would be benefit from the Internet provided that they use it wisely.
For instance
, people who are writing dissertation could search for new perspectives from the Internet to push their work to higher plateaus without copying all the idea.
Furthermore
, students from developing countries can freely access to the modern education from other developed nations
such
 as America and Europe via Coursera. These online courses could help to address the problems of long distance and finance for learners all around the world. In conclusion,
although
 the constant availability of
information
 on the Internet has an adverse influence of human’s mind, it would be useful if we utilize it properly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diminishes
  • shallow processing
  • critical evaluation
  • misinformation
  • unprecedented
  • discerningly
  • intellectual laziness
  • interactive content
  • problem-solving
  • actively engaged
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