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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided two maps demonstrate the information regarding the
island
, before the construction and after the change of
few
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a few
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 tourist spots. At the first
glance
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,glance
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 it is clearly seen that, during
year
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the year
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 2015,
at
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on
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 the north side of the
island
 there
were
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was
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
tree
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trees
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, which are now converted into
parking
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the parking
a parking
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area
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areas
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.During the past years,
in
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on
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east
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the east
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 coastline of the
island
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,island
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 few rides and parks were made for play
purpose
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purposes
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 and these rides
are still remain
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are still remaining
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same
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the same
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 as they were in the past.
Apart from
this
, in
middle
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the middle
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 of the
beach
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,beach
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 a new hotel is introduced. Moving
further
, big statues are
also
 built-up for the tourists,
beside
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besides
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 the hotel.
Moreover
, four swimming pools, which were in the corner of the parking area and remain stable, but
at
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on
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 the left side of these swimming pools there was a garden
also
.But, in the present time, the garden
is vanished
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vanishes
vanished
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 into a laughing club with lots of seating
section
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sections
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.
Overall
, in the past era, the
island
 did not have many facilities but after the
construction
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,construction
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 lots of new things had added for the tourists.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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