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A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: explain the arrangements you have made for him/her to get keys and enter the house tell your relative how to get from the station to your house say when you will be home and suggest what you could do together that evening

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Dear sister, Hi, hope you are doing well and I am writing
this
 letter to tell you that I am very glad to know that you are coming from Rajasthan to stay with me for one month and you will be reaching by train tomorrow in the morning but I would not be able to reach home till evening owned to my office
work
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workers
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. I gave the keys
of
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to
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house
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the house
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 to a neighbour and you can enter the house easily.
Moreover
, I suggest you
to
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apply
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book a cab for the house directly after reaching the station or you can take an auto as well from outside the railway station.
Furthermore
, please contact me after your arrival till reaching
the
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apply
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home ,At the same time,you can eat fruits and juice from
fridge
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the fridge
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 and I prepared some food for you
also
 and take
rest
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a rest
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 until evening.
Then
, I ensure you that we will enjoy
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a lot
alot
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ourselves alot
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 together with
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scrumptious
sumptuous
scumpcious
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a scumpcious
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 dinner and gossips and movies . Cheers, Bhawna
Submitted by Jasbir kaur on

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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