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Nowadays, many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages.

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Education is building block or rather foundation for the students to become successful in life. There has been a paradigm shift in decisions of choosing the universities, nowadays students prefer to study abroad due to its various reaping benefits, but
on the contrary
 there are detrimental effects as well. Personally, I see eye to eye with the central idea. On one hand, Supporters believe that there are concrete evidences which prove a significant supremacy of foreign courses as compared to the student’s own country, due to the plethora of advance researches & practical approach towards imparting knowledge.
For example
, there is a proven study done by Howard University that, international students in foreign universities have significantly increased by 80%.
Secondly
, top organisations around the world evidently, prefer students with top foreign universities, due their key strengths
such
 as, easy adaptability in the corporate world, communication skills, practical decision making approach and latest knowhow of the business world. To illustrate, all the research done by universities like Oxford, Yale & Howard is extensively adopted by the top businesses to improve employees best practices & policies.
On the other hand
, due to the change in the preferences for universities, native’s local universities are losing their importance as well as businesses which in return is leading to the brain drain.
For instance
, a student studying from aboard would prefer to work and settle in abroad. Apparently, has downsized the economy because,
initially
 they spend on
an
Suggestion
a
 schooling and once start working in the country of their learning, they start spending in foreign land, henceforth, foreign countries have a win win situation. To summarize, as there are two sides of the coin studying abroad has that too, albeit for the students it can be fruitful.
However
, the value of teaching system in their respective country is decreasing. I think the Government should rework & reform, the study system in
such
 way that it stand par with the best Universities.
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