IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

By 2030 many people think the world will have changed disastrously. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #world
Nowadays, the
world
 is changing at an alarming rate. Various inventions are being created day by day. So, what will happen in 2030? Try to imagine the
world
 in
10-year period
Suggestion
the 10 - year period
. It is a complicated issue to consider. Tremendous changes we will face up to and how these changes will affect us. Now I try to write my imaginations and I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, we need to think about what aspects our talk should include. In my mind, there are several issues, which are more hot topics as environmental, educational, well-being of society, health care, work market as well. A good deal of the above mentioned should take into account in a wake of the pandemic situation covered the
world
 where we live caused by COVID 19 may lead disastrous conclusions as work market is shrinking, great demand of people can lose their workplace
as a result
. In many societies these days, people are concerned about environmental problems. We all know that humanity always harms Mother Nature. These include dumping of waste in public places, deforestation, the launch of satellites and many toxins emitted by the enterprises and vehicles.
Nevertheless
, we have questions; if so how will it have been stated with the environment by 2030? Alternatively, we can preserve our universe by preventing
this
, and we protect it? Opinions on
this
 issue are divided, and my own consideration is that in ten years, today's problems will be tackled and many changes will occur in nature and society. If humanity treats the Earth well, the depletion of the ozone layer.
Moreover
, the obstacles of the waste products that cause environmental pollution, will be solved around the
world
, if facilities, which is special reproduced garbage can, are installed densely populated areas,
such
 as on roads, state, and medical institutions.
Therefore
, it can be said that if we take care of nature, it will
also
 protect us, and in 2030 we will live in the pure air and scenic environment. The latter, if I write about my life, I hope to have a favourite profession and a happy family. My parents, relatives, and friends will surround me. If I try, I will achieve my goals, and I will be among the people who have a place in society. What I mean by
that is
, basically, all the things I will manifest in my experience of life. All of my thoughts, feelings, actions, and experiences shape my
world
.
Submitted by Mohamed Abdel Wanis on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: