The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
The pie charts illustrate how
much
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British
students
were able to speak other languages
as well as
English at one university between 2000 and 2010. What stands out from the graph
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proportion
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the proportion
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of
students
able to speak Spanish only and another language
in addition
to English experienced
a
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increase from 2000 to 2010,
whereas
the percentage of no French only witnessed a decrease during
the
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this
period.
Moreover
,
proportion
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the proportion
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of
German only
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spoken remained stable. As can be seen from the graph, the rate of British
students
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spoken
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Spanish only
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2000 and 2010 come top ranking with 30% and 35% respectively.
In addition
, the rate of
students
able to speak another language register a slow rise,
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made up from 15% to 20%.
However
, the percentage of French only spoken started at 15% and
then
drop slightly by 10%.
On the other hand
proportion of
students
able to speak German only remain constant at 10%
during
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the
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from 2000 to 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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