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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is the statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

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Recently,
Tourism
 has been developing in many
countries
. Some
people
 consider that it has plenty of negative effects on the
countries
people
 visit
to
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. I agree that the
place
 swarmed by
tourists
 has many issues
such
 as increasing local food
price
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prices
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 and
lack
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a lack
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 of infrastructure. One of the negative effects of
tourism
 on the
countries
 is that tourist destinations
has
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 not a sufficient infrastructure, which means that the population of those
place
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places
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 density is not higher than big cities, and when they confront
with
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the influx of
tourists
 visiting
place
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places
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 certain months of the year, residents living long-term those
place
 could be impacted negatively their social life and environment. For
this
 reason, they ought to visit different months
which
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 the places are not crowded to reduce
harmful
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the harmful
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 impacts of
tourism
 on local cultures and environments.
Therefore
, there might be
balanced
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 population density against the negative effect of
tourism
. The other harmful impact of
tourism
 on the
countries
 is that the food and services
prices
 could be dramatically increased as demand for those rises, which
occur
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causes
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economical
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/livelihood
problem
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problems
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on
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local
people
.
For example
, local shops often increase the price
since
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knowing that consumption rises significantly in
tourism
 seasons. Local
people
 cannot afford
against
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the increased
prices
.
As a result
, they are likely to become poor
due to
 the negative
effect
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effects
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 of
tourism
. I think
tourists
 play an important role
to decrease
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in decreasing
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price
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prices
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 there.
Whey
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 they report
this
 issue to
government
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the government
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, local shop owners are exposed to
decrease
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prices
. With
this
 method, the negative impact of
tourism
 can be reduced.
To conclude
, the harmful effects of
tourism
 result from rising
prices
 in
local
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the local
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 market and having lack of infrastructure in holiday
destination
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destinations
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.
Tourists
 can solve those problems by reporting
highest
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the highest
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prices
 to
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the
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government and visiting there in
off-seasons
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the off-seasons
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.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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