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The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the number of
hybird
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hybrid
 automobiles sold worldwide from 2006 to 2009.
While
 the consumption of
hybird
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hybrid
 vehicles had
a
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the
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 same pattern in Japan and other countries, with both gradually increasing from 2006 to 2009, there was a significant fluctuation in
US
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the US
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 over the period. From 2006 to 2009, there was a slight growth in the number of
hybird
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hybrid
vehicles
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sales
 in Japan. But
then
, a significant increase in the consumption of
hybird
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hybrid
automobile
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automobiles
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 from nearly 90000 to 340000
sales
 was seen between 2008 and 2009.
Strating
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Starting
 at just over 50,000
sales
 in 2006 and
this
 rose steadily to nearly 325000, Japan became the country which had the highest number of
hybird
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hybrid
 automobiles
sales
 in 2009. The consumption of
hybird
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hybrid
 vehicles in
US
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the US
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 increased sharply from 250000 to 350000
sales
 before dropping to approximately 275000 in 2009, followed by a fall of nearly 75000
sales
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hybird, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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