Car ownership has increased so rapidly ove the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now "one big traffic jam". How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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people
who own
cars
have highly
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increased over the
last
thirty years with negative consequences
such
as big traffic jams in many cities around the world. I strongly believe that
this
claim is valid and can be proved on a daily basis through economic
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, by measuring the stress of drivers stuck in traffic and
also
by measuring the air quality. The number of
cars
has increased, especially in those cities where public transportation
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not been adequately implemented. Despite
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the scarcity and the inefficiency of public transport the main reason why
people
use
cars
,
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is not the only one. There is
also
another factor that
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people
to own
cars
and is
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cultural background. In Italy,
forfor
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example, using private
transports
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is a trend. The first thing you want as a teenager is
the
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driver
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license. Driving
cars
become quickly a proper habit and
people
use it
also
for short tracts. I noticed a similar attitude in
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countries.
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cars
is a status symbol of power, wealth and independence.
Nevertheless
, other European cities see the trend in a different way and governments have put more effort
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the usage of
cars
.
For example
, in Germany, the efficiency of public means of transport has convinced
people
to use them. I think that the government has a central role in discouraging
people
from using their
cars
. To do so, the government has to implement a strong transport infrastructure
that is
easier and cheaper than using
cars
.
For example
, by creating a strong connection within areas in a city,
transports
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can reach easily many places that are
further
away.
In addition
to
this
,
bus
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, trains and undergrounds, should work until late and be frequent. They should not only be technically efficient, but they should
also
be affordable and varying in
the
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cost depending on the consumer’s wage or status. By applying these measures, it may be possible to convince more
people
to change their habits.
Whereas
, in a place where the car culture is stronger,
in addition
to what's already mentioned, it should be taught about the negative impacts of driving
cars
on the environment and on the level of stress. In conclusion, governments and
people
can do a lot to reduce the usage of
cars
and the
measurements
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should include improving the efficiency of alternative means of transportation,
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the cost of public
transports
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and
also
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the
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cultural behaviour.
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