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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Sharing
information
 in scientific research, business and the academic world
is considered
Suggestion
are considered
 to be beneficial;
however
,
on the other hand
, it is
also
 believed that some
information
 is confidential that it cannot be shared freely
on
Suggestion
in
 a public forum. In my opinion, sharing
information
 has both advantages and disadvantages.
Hence
, let’s ponder over the given statement and discuss both viewpoints. In the field of scientific research, business and academic world, most of the people work upon creating something new in their respective fields.
Information
 pertaining to
such
 fields is always confidential in nature and generally it is advisable not to share it on any public forum. There have been several cases of people quarrelling over the ownership of research journals or other innovations shared on public platforms.
On the other hand
, sharing
information
 about any
product
 on a public forum can result in the production of a better
product
 and
this
 will not have been possible if they had kept the
information
 secret. Most of the multi-national companies
such
 as Apple, Alphabet etc.
launch
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Launch
 a beta version or lab tested version of their
product
 to see the reactions of
general public
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the general public
. On the basis of their reactions, the companies decide whether to proceed or to drop the idea for
production
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the production
 of that
product
. To conclude, I would like to say that every rose has a thorn and sharing
information
 publicly has its own pros and cons. In my opinion,
information
 shall be kept confidential until a full-fledged
product
 is formed. Once
such
 products are launched due credit is given to the inventor
then
 only one should invite others for their
view points
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoints
 and ideas to improve the performance and efficacy of the
product
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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