Some people say that children should stay in school until the age of 18. Others suggest that educating children untill the age of 14 is enough.

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According to some people children should studying at

school

till 18

age

. But in

this

time, other parents think that for children will be enough stay in

school

until 14

age

. I agree with

this

both views, but in my opinion the

second

view correctly. Because, children in them life should do more experiments and learn from

them

of them or themselves

their

mistakes. If the

child

would study by 18

age

, he or she can lose important parts of them times in their life. On the one hand, In Developed and developing world each person goes to

school

and take a lot of interesting facts about

this

world. The study in

school

the perfect time for each

child

in my view. With

this

, children nowadays go to

school

until 16

age

. But more parents want that their children go to

school

till 18

age

. As result in will mines that they are would study till them adulthood. In my opinion, it is not right. Because children should change their lifestyle so far how it is possible in my view. With

this

child

can be open them close talents and horizons.

However

, how show for us statistic forms children can learn all

school

program in the 8 year. With

this

we can understand that for

child

to enough studying at

school

only by 14

age

Moreover

, after

school

child

can change them location about studying in my opinion.

Also

, children till 14

age

can choice the special direction about their dream job. And go to the them way after finishing their

school

. I think it is would be great, because each person should choice them way and go. To conclude, the stay in

school

till 14

age

benefit than till 18

age

. Because after 14

age

child

Suggestion

children

can choice with which they want to work.

Furthermore

, they can full open themselves horizons and talents. To know more and more person should change their location and position in life.

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