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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British students in England at a University who know to speak other languages apart from English in the year 2000 and 2010. Overall, Spanish was the highest spoken
language
 in
both
 the years, while the minimum speaking was German for
both
 the years. The number of students who can speak Spanish were 30% in 2000 and has increased by 5% by 2010 and it remained the highest spoken
language
.
However
, the combined percent of pupils who can converse in another and two other languages was 25% in 2000, which has increased by 5% in each
language
 by 2010 with a total of 35%. Whereas, pupils who cannot speak anything other than English were 20% in 2000, and by 2010 the count decreased to 10%. The novice who can converse in German were only 10% in
both
 the given years.
Moreover
, pupils who can communicate in French were 15% in 2000, which has decreased by 5% in 2010.
However
, the combined percent of pupils who can converse in another and two other languages was 25% in 2000, which has increased by 5% in each
language
 by 2010 with a total of 35%. Whereas, pupils who cannot speak anything other than English were 20% in 2000, and by 2010 the count decreased to 10%. The novice who can converse in German were only 10% in
both
 the given years.
Moreover
, pupils who can communicate in French were 15% in 2000, which has decreased by 5% in 2010
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