Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

It is true that nowadays children spend much
time
in front of the
television but
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television, but
tv
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the tv
is not learning tool as
book
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the book
as. While I completely agree with
this
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time
is being wasted to watching television, I believe that
tv
programmes contributes to education as well. On the one hand
,
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,
children tend to
watcht
look attentively
watch
television rather than to read books because
tv
is more comfortable for children.
However
,
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,
tv
is not an efficient as books and
tv
leads children are
less well
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less good
-educated today.
For
example there
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example, there
is a
tv
every
childrens
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children's
house and parents do work a lot in
contemporary world
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the contemporary world
.
That is
to mean children are being ignored from parents and developed technology are attracting
children
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children, such
such
as
tv
,
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,
telephone and computer.
however they
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However, they
However they
cannaot
can not
cannot
replace the book as
learning tool
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a learning tool
learning tools
On the other hand
,
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,
tv
is a good
way
to attract children in front of the
tv
.Young boys and girls watch
tv
than elder people. And nowadays
tv
proggrammes
an announcement of the events that will occur as part of a theatrical or sporting event
programmes
programs
are developed
to give lesson
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to give a lesson
for children and they interested in
tv
channels namely
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channels, namely
:
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:
English for kids and
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
catoons
soft silky fibers from cotton plants in their raw state
cottons
.
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.
these
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These
channels contribute and focus on
children
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children's
education.
For
example parents
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example, parents
are seeking
easy
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an easy way
way
to enhance their
children
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child's
children's
education and
tv
is one of the best
way
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ways
to spend children’s
time
to watching different programmes. In conclusion,
tv
does not compensate as books the precious
time
of children
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children, but
but it is a good
way
to teach children by online
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational tool
  • Documentaries
  • Passive consumption
  • Critical thinking
  • Imagination
  • Attention span
  • Literacy skills
  • Screen time
  • Parental guidance
  • Digital materials
  • Interactive learning
  • Multimedia resources
  • Cognitive development
  • Reading comprehension
  • Balanced approach
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