SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS BEST TO ACCEPT A BAD SITUATION, SUCH AS AN UNSATISFACTORY JOB OR SHORTAGE OF MONEY. OTHERS ARGUE THAT IT IS BETTER TO TRY AND IMPROVE SUCH SITUATION. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

#people #situation #job #shortage #money

SOME STATES THAT IT IS BETTER TO ACCEPT UNSATISFACTORY JOB OR POVERTY, WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE THAT ONE SHOULD TRY TO IMPROVE

SUCH

SITUATION WITH A VIEW TO ENSURING BETTERMENT. IN MY OPINION, EVERYONE SHOULD TRY HEART AND SOUL IN ORDER TO PROMOTE HIS CURRENT STATUS. ON THE ONE HAND, PEOPLE LIVING AT VARIOUS PARTS OF THE

WORLD

ARE ALWAYS STRUGGLING WITH THEIR OWN LIFE, AND IT IS SOMETIMES DIFFICULT FOR THEM TO EVADE FROM WHERE THEY ARE. THE REASON IS MAYBE THEY ARE FROM A WAR TORN AREA OR THEY ARE DEPRIVED OF THEIR AMENITIES

SUCH

AS EDUCATION, TRANSPORTATION, FOOD OR EVEN FRESHWATER.

FOR EXAMPLE

, MAJORITY OF INHABITANTS LIVING IN GHANA DEPENDS ON RAINWATER AS THEY HAVE TO COVER ALMOST 20 KILOMETER DAILY IN ORDER TO REACH THE NEAREST WATER SOURCE. IT MIGHT BE POSSIBLE FOR MEN, BUT NOT FOR PREGNANT WOMEN, OLD PEOPLE OR CHILDREN. AND, AS A MATTER OF FACT, IT IS HIGH TIME FOR THEM TO ACCEPT WHERE THEY ARE AS THINKING OF A COMFORTABLE

WORLD

IS NOTHING BUT A DREAM IN

SUCH

CIRCUMSTANCE.

IN CONTRAST

, PEOPLE, WHO DO NOT FACE DIFFICULTY IN ENJOYING BASIC RIGHTS, SHOULD TRY THEIR BEST AS DEVELOPMENT OF ONE AS WELL AS ONE’S TERRRITORY IS IMPROBABLE WITHOUT HARD WORK. IF THEY TRY BY ALL MEANS, THEY WILL BE ABLE TO LEAD A PROSPEROUS LIFE, AND

AS A RESULT

, THEIR HOMELAND WILL EVEVATE THEIR POSITION AND PLAY A VITAL ROLE IN

WORLD

POLITICS AS WELL AS IN HUMANITARIAN AID.

FOR INSTANCE

, THINK OF GERMANY AFTER

SECOND

WORLD

WAR AS MOST OF THE MAJOR CITIES WERE DILAPIDATED AT THAT TIME, BUT WITHIN A VERY SHORT TIME FRAME GERMANS RETAIN THEIR POSITION AS A DEVELOPED NATION.

HENCE

, BECOME A COMPETITOR OF AMERICANS, WINNER OF THAT WAR, ONLY BY DINT OF DILIGENCE. SO, EVERYBODY SHOULD TRY TO UPLIFT THEIR LIVING STATUS AS WE, HUMAN BEING, ARE BETTER THAN ANY OTHER CREATION, AND THERE IS NO DIGNITY IN ACCEPTING A MISERABLE LIFE. IN CONCLUSION, I BELIEVE THAT WE HAVE TO CREATE A BETTER FUTURE

INSTEAD

OF ACCEPTING PRESENT SITUATION AS THROUGH

THIS

WAY WE WILL BE ABLE TO ENSURE A BETTER FUTURE FOR US ALONG WITH OUR CHILDREN.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

361 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Contentment
Resilience
Personal growth
Endurance
Initiative
Advancement
Catalyst
Financial stability
Status quo
Innovation
Missed opportunities
Life satisfaction
Adverse situations
Taking control
Risk assessment
Change management
Self-improvement
Motivation
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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS BEST TO ACCEPT A BAD SITUATION, SUCH AS AN UNSATISFACTORY JOB OR SHORTAGE OF MONEY. OTHERS ARGUE THAT IT IS BETTER TO TRY AND IMPROVE SUCH SITUATION. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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