Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people argue that we no longer remember the original meaning of festivals, and that most of us treat them as opportunities to have fun. While I agree that enjoyment seems to be the priority during festival times, I do not agree that people have forgotten what these festivals mean. On the one hand, religious and traditional festivals have certainly become times
for
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since
celebration
Suggestion
Celebration
. In the UK, Christmas is a good example of a festival period when people are most concerned with shopping, giving and receiving presents, decorating their homes and enjoying traditional meals with their families. Most people look forward to Christmas as a holiday period, rather than a time to practise religion. Similar behaviour can be seen during non-religious festivals,
such
as Bonfire Night. People associate
this
occasion with making fires, watching firework displays, and perhaps going to large events in local parks;
in other words
,
enjoyment
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the enjoyment
is people’s primary goal.
However
, I disagree with the idea that the underlying meaning of
such
festivals has been forgotten. In UK primary schools, children learn in detail about the religious reasons for celebrating Christmas, Easter and a variety of festivals in other religions.
For example
, in late December, children sing Christmas songs which have a religious content, and they may even perform nativity plays telling the story of Jesus’ birth. Families
also
play a role in
passing knowledge
Suggestion
A passing knowledge
Passing knowledge
of religious festivals’ deeper significance on to the
next
generation. The
same
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The same
Same
is true for festivals that have a historical background,
such
as Bonfire Night or Halloween, in the sense that people generally learn the stories behind these occasions
at
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in
as
an
early
at or near the beginning of a period of time or course of events or before the usual or expected time
Early
age
the month following July and preceding September
Aug
. In conclusion,
although
people mainly
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people, mainly
want to enjoy themselves during festivals, I believe
that
Suggestion
That
they are still aware of the reasons for these celebrations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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