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It is clear that human activity has greatly impacted the health of the environment. What is your opinion?

#activity #health #environment
The connection between human
behavior
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 and climate change cannot be ignored. A small minority feel that
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however
, I am of the mind that science has proven the relationship to be valid. In the following paragraphs, I will provide justification for my standpoint.
Firstly
, on a broad scale, the correlation between air pollution and climate change has been proven time and again. As a case in point,
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a study published by the United Nations just
last
 year,
it
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noted that greenhouse gases have risen by 70% since the era of industrialization began. The enormity of
this
 effect is observed
world-wide
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, and Portland, Oregon, is no exception.
Last
 year,
for instance
, we received more snow than had been seen in one season in the previous two centuries. There were 10 snow days declared, where all schools and most workplaces were closed. The local population were effectively trapped in their homes, as the city was not equipped to deal with these storms.
Moreover
, one can see the detrimental effects of individual
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 in immediate circumstances as well. As an illustration,
last
 summer, one high school student threw a firework off a cliff into the Columbia Gorge.
This
 small action resulted in the most massive fire the area had experienced in recorded history. It took over 66 days for firefighters to gain control
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 the blaze. Unfortunately, it is estimated that the area will not achieve natural balance again for another two decades. In sum, the obvious link between our actions and the decimation of the environment must be recognized as truth. My sincere hope is that humankind will seek to
heel
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 the natural wounds it has caused in the immediate future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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