The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the changing time, a paradigm shift has been observed that the way people living has been changed due to the enhancement of the technology devices. Some echelons of society believe that mobile phones are harmful to mankind so it should be banned the same as smoking. I disagree with the statement because of various reasons, which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs. Smoking is a totally different concept as compare to mobile phones because smoking
cause
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causes
cancer, which I believe mobile cannot do anything like that. Smoking
cause
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causes
smoker as well as a non-smoker. Recent research proved that the passive smoker is at more risk of cancer than active smoker
that is
why smoking is banned in public places. Even mobiles are
also
restricted at some public places
such
as religious, hospitals, library and other many places because sometimes mobile distract the people from their work
such
as in the library in between the reading book, a loud voice of mobile destroy the peace of the library and distract all the individuals, who are available at the time there.
However
, there are numerous merits of the use of mobile phones.
Firstly
, mobiles are the only device
nowadays which
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nowadays, which
connects the people to each other because of
this
one’s connect with their
family
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families
and friends no matter where one is living in the world.
Hence
, it connects the world as a global village.
Secondly
, mobiles are the source of education as well as entertainment.
Therefore
, we can use mobile as a book for reading books and many more purposes
such
as playing games, listening to music, watch videos, etc. To recapitulate, mobile phones
are play
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are playing
play
have played
a vital role in every individual life because of its commercial and
finically
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financial
financially
use in society. So I do not believe that the comparison of mobile with smoking is fair enough because of its great benefits
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • antisocial
  • social interactions
  • negative impacts
  • banning
  • regulated
  • completely banned
  • education
  • awareness campaigns
  • responsible
  • mobile phone use
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