The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005
The maps illustrate the layout of the seaside resort of
Templeton
in 1990 and how it looked 15 years later
Overall
, there is a considerable change in terms of the layout between 1990 and 2005 of
Templeton
. More modernized amenities were constructed
as well as
the installation of the public transport system with the extension of railway and road. Looking at the maps in more detail, we can see that In the southwest area of
this
place, it witnessed a contraction
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the
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of residential houses in 1990 to make way for skyscrapers 15 years later which
close
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to a new big supermarket. Some of the vacant land on the northwest side of the river in 1990 was
also
used to build buildings. The railway system was extended across the southern coast of
Templeton
. Over the
15-year-period
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15-year period
, the school, hospital and gas station still existed. Green space shrunk to give space to
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manufactory. The modern transportation system was developed after 15 years with the erection of an airport and a Ferry Terminal in the West of
Templeton
.
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