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There is a stereotype that older people are less capable in their work, or are less creative

#stereotype #people #work
In Vietnam, when
people
 turn a certain age, they are often forced or asked to leave the
company
 where they work. Even someone who is 60 years old has several good working years ahead of them. There is a stereotype that older
people
 are less capable in their work, or are less creative than younger
people
. I think that young
people
 and older
people
 both have strengths and weaknesses in their creative processes. Young
people
 are often desired for a job because they seem to have a 'fresher' perspective in life.
People
 who are young are more open to new
ideas
 and
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new ways of doing business.
This
 helps their creative process because they can synthesize
ideas
 from a wide variety of sources.
For example
, a young
person
 surfing the Internet reads an article about business networking in Africa. An older
person
 might not be interested in
such
 an article or may never even encounter it. The young
person
 now knows a different perspective that might help him and his
company
 in the future. Older
people
 are not
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 as open as young
people
 to new
ideas
, but they are more experienced. They have worked for more years, and have lived through many different situations. It is good to have many different and new
ideas
, but it is bad to waste time and money on
ideas
 that do not work. An older, more experienced
person
 knows better which
ideas
 have good potential and which
ideas
 are dead ends. That experience can save the
company
 from wasted effort. A smart
company
 lets workers rise to their full potential. Even though they are creative in different ways, young
people
 and old
people
 can both contribute to the strength of a business.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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