In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

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is a big decision to make. In some parts of the world, people value
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their own house because it is a sense of achievement rather than renting which could not save money in the long run. From my perspective, residence ownership is a natural human desire. First and foremost, many individuals seek to own their personal house where they
could
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live with peace of mind.
Although
they may struggle to acquire it,
but
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many people tend to purchase homes as per their
need
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.
For instance
, in many
western
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countries, people mortgage and take loans from the banks to purchase property.
Whereas
, living as a tenant, one not only
have
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to abide
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rules and regulations set by the landlords, but
also
individual can not renovate the property
according to
his need.
Thus
, it is imperative to have
a
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personal property where one can live peacefully.
Nonetheless
, I believe that having a home has many positive aspects
such
as it gives freedom in doing many things. Persons will not
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bound to anyone's rules and regulations and owners have the opportunity to renovate frequently. Taking myself as an example, when I was living in the suburbs of Auburn, Sydney, I
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even move a refrigerator to another place in the kitchen area, so having a personal house is necessary to thrive in
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society.
Furthermore
, the sense of satisfaction can be felt in our own building which could be missing in renting
apartment
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so,
this
will make the owner feel more relaxed.
Hence
, owning a home gives satisfaction.
To sum up
, a place to live
is
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truly depend on the dwellers
either if
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they live as a tenant or
having
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his
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own flat.
However
, renting a home
could not
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save finances
while
ownership can save money.
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grammar
While you have clearly presented your ideas, there are a few grammatical errors which need to be corrected. For instance, you have written 'the sense of satisfaction can be felt in our own building' which is a bit awkward. It could be better stated as, 'there's a certain sense of satisfaction that comes from living in one's own home'.
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You have clearly presented your views with relevant examples. However, try to be a bit more analytical. It would improve your writing if you could describe why there are such cultural differences in home ownership and further discuss why renting does not save money in the long term compared to owning a home.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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