International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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humankind. The flourishing
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industry
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by offering international holiday packages to exotic locales. Many will agree that opening up a
place
to international tourists brings about immense prosperity.
However
, critics will argue
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negative effects that
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has on the local people and their habitat. I strongly advocate the latter view and through
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essay will explain how the disadvantages of
tourism
supersede the benefits.
Firstly
, a big faction of the society believes that the economy of an untouched
place
on earth can be improved by introducing its beauty to the outside people. As tourists start visiting a
place
, it becomes a hot attraction. More locals want to provide
tourism
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thereby increasing competitiveness. If unchecked,
this
business rivalry leads to overcrowding and the whole purpose of visiting an exotic
place
is defeated. To illustrate with an example, a recent article in the Traveller magazine stated that some holiday locations once highly admired, were downgraded as the
place
was overcrowded throughout the year.
Secondly
, it is obvious that many a pristine location has been marred
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its natural beauty just because of the rush of tourists. A great example of
this
is the Great Barrier Reef, where non-stop diving was the main cause of the corals getting spoiled. The government
however
was slow in taking any preventive action
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and rather promoted
tourism
heavily.
Consequently
,
this
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to the complete closure of the spot thereby posing a negative impact on the economy of the area. To summarise, from the examples illustrated above, I firmly believe that unregulated international
tourism
to pristine locations is having
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effect on the environment. The government needs to weigh the pros and cons of incessantly promoting areas that
otherwise
require natural conservation of habitat.
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