in today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both the parents to work. while some believe that children in these families benefit from the additional income, other believe that they feel lack of support because of their parents' absence. discuss both the views and give your opinion. give reasonable answer and include any example from your own experience.
Task 1
The given pie chart illustrates
numbers
of Suggestion
the numbers
total populations
in the past and in the Suggestion
the total populations
future which
represents the total Accept comma addition
future, which
population
in each country; including Italy and Yemen in 2000 and 2050.
Overall, In 2050, Yemen population
in 0-14 and 15-59 are expected to significant
Suggestion
significantly
decreased
in numbers of populations. Whereas, in the Suggestion
decrease
age
of over 60 years are steadily rise
. In 2050, Italy, 15-59 and Suggestion
rising
age
of over 60 will rise, conversely
, 0-14 years are slowly dropped from 2000.
As can clearly see, Yemen, 0-14 age
group is hugely dropped
by 13.1 Suggestion
has hugely dropped
percent
and the age
group of 15-59 experienced growth by 11.6 percent
, furthermore
, the age
of over 60 is forecast to slightly increase
in the future. In Italy, 0 – 14 age
group is going to significantly by 18.4 percent
, finally
, the number of 18-59 and over 60 will follow same pattern
which is expected inconsistent drop by 10.8 Suggestion
the same pattern
percent
and 3.8 percent
, respectively.
Task 2
Some people believe that spending budget on building more sports facilities would improve better public health
, however
, some says that sports facilities is not only the factors that can increase
health
of the Suggestion
the health
population
. From my perspective, expenditure on sports facilities would not increase
public health
, however
, it will only increase
health
of athletic which will be discussed in the essay.
Suggestion
the health
Firstly
, sport facilities is not the only ways to improve health
of the population
, however
, government
should emphasise on eating healthy Suggestion
the government
instead
of spending budge on sports. These can be done by promoting healthy eating and eating less fats, sugar, etc. Therefore
, outdoor activities can also
be done without going to sports facilities, conversely
, they can spend more time doing sports at home or outdoor in
the park.
Suggestion
at
In
the other hand, government should Suggestion
On
expenditure
on ensuring the citizen can have free access to Suggestion
expend
gyms
facilities, as some people are struggling with poverty they might not prioritise on money to spend on going to gyms. Governments should Suggestion
gym
gym's
increase
better awareness of the public health
by using the mass media and educate children at school how to stay healthily
. Suggestion
healthy
Although
, increasing better awareness of healthy styles is not the factors but
other factors should be counted Accept comma addition
factors, but
such
as time commitment to cook stead of consume junk food.
In conclusion, rely on spending more money on expending sport facilities but
should Accept comma addition
facilities, but
also
educate the public regarding to impact of unhealth
lifestyles which as not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind
unhealthy
portray
life expectancy and Suggestion
portrayed
increase
better quality of life of the public health
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