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Your friend is about to move into a new house. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter offer to help him/her to move explain how exactly you can help ask him/her some questions about the new house

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Dear Luna, How is everything going? I’m complimenting you about your moving
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new house. But don’t worry, I want to help you with moving
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new apartment. As you know, my husband will work tomorrow but I’m free all day. If you need
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help, you will call me.
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 to help
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 packing your things. I have watched
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 video about technology packing
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. I suggest
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 we can use that method. I could help
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packing boxes or bags. Does have your house special security, it is very important our days. I know you wrote
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 pool. Did you finish it? Drop me a line when you be free. I look forward to hearing from you soon. All the best, Julia
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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