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Some people believe that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product. Discuss if you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that people
are usually bear
Suggestion
are usually born
are usually bearing
are usually borne
have usually borne
usually bear
 in mind that having a stand-out
product
 is the only method to prosper the marketing campaign and help the business to succeed.
Although
 the suggestion seems feasible
,
Accept space
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 concur that there
are
Suggestion
is
 more than just one way. At the outset, a unique
product
 can help a
company
 flourish because of its creativity. People are more likely to welcome the new things in order to make their lives become easier.
Otherwise
, others buy it because of the
curiousity
a state in which you want to learn more about something
curiosity
. Thereupon, that different products can make a huge impact on the
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 industry because the plethora of people would need and consume it.
Hence
, the
company
 would gain profits and the consumers are forced to go to that
company
 to buy
instead
 of others because of the word "unique"
,
Accept space
,
 means they are unable to find the other places. On the flip side, there are so many ways to promote and to sell a
product
. Sometimes, a stand-out idea does not mean
the best
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the good
 fortune, it is because the best seller includes marketing campaigns and
also
 if the usage is suitable for the user's demand.
For example
, a Japanese
company
 invented the small fan on the chopsticks in order to make the noodles less
hot
a form of energy that is transferred by a difference in temperature
heat
 while eating, as we can see it is a very creative thinking but it is not popular because it is not fit for people's need.
Moreover
, if the marketing process
is not work
Suggestion
is not working
does not work
doesn't work
 effectively, the
company
 would face with the failure because the
first
 impression of the
product
 is
such
a
Suggestion
an
 immensely important step. In a nutshell, I concur that the development of
a
Suggestion
an
 enterprise depends on many facets.
Hence
, a
product
 may be different from others and people need to take a serious consideration before releasing something
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