Nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes. Do you agree or disagree?

Advances in nuclear
technology
are resulting
improvements
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on
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various cases. These days it can be observed that many
countries
have been benefiting the nuclear
energy
in militant political activities rather than its positive aspects in people’s
life
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.
However
, there are some proponents who claim that achieving nuclear
technology
is essential for superpowers to establish a power balance system
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in
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the globe, I personally agree with
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the
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statement and believe that
this
technology
should be used for humanitarian aims.
Firstly
, on the positive side, the advent of nuclear
technology
has been leading to a revolution to tackle
energy
crises for all
countries
around the
world
.
According to
the experts researches nuclear
energy
is an unlimited resource which can be replaced by fossil
fuel
. On top of that, using
this
technology
not only can solve
fuel
shortage problems but
also
is an
environment friendly
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fuel
.
Moreover
, in medical
sciences
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nuclear
technology
has
used
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as an alternative way to cure some diseases.
Consequently
, nuclear
energy
has many positive impacts, with which the
world
would be a safe and proper place to live. From
political
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point of view, nuclear capability is a facility for developed
countries
to govern other nations. In fact,
increasing
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number of
countries
now have nuclear weapons or have the
technology
required to make
such
bombs,
makes
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the
world
to
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a competition and it is the main reason
of
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conflicts among governments. Even though, all nations try to have
this
technology
not to use its advantages to increase standard living, just as an essential defensive tool against super powers threats.
therefore
, nuclear
technology
is a dangerous option for governments which use it as a competitive advantage and it would have been better if it had never been used to create nuclear weapons. In conclusion,
although
not
to be
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equipped with nuclear
technology
could be a danger for some third
world
countries
in the face of powers with nuclear
weapon
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, from my point of view, its beneficial usages
such
as replacement with fossil
fuel
and its influences in curing various diseases should be more considerable. In the current
world
, despite environmental
problems
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we need peace more than ever.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • constructive
  • sustainable
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • electricity generation
  • energy demands
  • cancer treatment
  • radioactive imaging
  • scientific research
  • advancements
  • regulation
  • safety measures
  • accidents
  • misuse
  • waste management
  • radioactive materials
  • responsibly
  • benefits
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