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You recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. The weather was very unusual for the time of year and the heating / cooling system in the hotel was quite inadequate. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: • give details of what went wrong • explain what you had to do to overcome the problem at the time • say what action you would like the manager to take You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...,

#hotel #city #weather #time #year #system #manager #action #address
Dear Sir/Madam,
This
 letter is regarding the stay at Hotel H in the month of November. During the trip to Montreal. As you know
that is
 the month of winter and the heating systems should be in good
conditions
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 as the weather is very cold during
this
 time. There was a debilitating issue that arise at midnight where I was not able to change the temperature of the room due to its remote not functioning properly. To make
this
 right, I had to go to purchase a portable heater.
However
, that was not effective at all as the size of the room was quite big.
Furthermore
, I had to put on my jacket
sleep
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 which made me uncomfortable. There should be
portable
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 heater in the rooms or should be available at request.
Besides
this
, remote control power cells should be available in the rooms so that one could fix it by themselves. Hope you take the appropriate actions. yours faithfully, Dhruv Patel.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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